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Again, not the most exciting chapter, but I promise you it will come!
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I am going to disagree with you;-) It may not be all action, but it is still exciting the way you are weaving the thoughts and feelings of your character into the action of the POTCO plot. I am thoroughly enjoying another viewpoint on the happenings and possible other meanings of events that I just more or less took at face value. This is a very well written story though you might want to do a bit of editing on the above chapter............a few words were left out. For example:
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She took another sip before saying, “I have things today.”
Josie looked at her in surprise. “Things to do? But you just got here.”
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Minor issue and doesn't matter, but did slow me down a bit while reading and I really, REALLY wanted to read fast.