I like how you are always able to incorporate what has happened in the game into your story, such as with the invasions or the stowaways. Your detail is good. The imagery you have during the invasions is excellent. I do feel that if it had been the first time Jolly had invaded Padres, it could have been better. It was still great though. I can't believe you're leaving for a month and ending it there......
ah well. Nice job!