[Privateer]

Keeper, that's a great story. It really shows you the depths of greed and stupidity. Your story also shows the other side of the story.

But, you need to use synonyms instead of using one word over and over again.
'As they sailed onward, the dawn faded and again the mists that seemed to forever tread behind them, floating eerily upon the waves. It called to them, 'Come, your time on earth is finished. Can you not see? Even now you master sends you to a second death, come back to the rest which awaits you.' '
Instead:
'As they sailed onward, the almost unbearably bright dawn faded and again the dark, cold mists that seemed to forever tread behind their wrecked ship, floating eerily upon the waves. The undulating mists tempted them, saying, 'Come, your time on earth is finished. Can you not see? Even now you master sends you to another death, come back to the rest which awaits you in the depths of this mist.' '