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I like how you give that ciffhanger in the end. I also like how you tie in Jack Sparrow and his cards of cheating ( was he? ) I would like to know what you had in your hand though? That would be interesting to know.
So far very good, but I think you need to let the flow go a tad more. You need to go from one to another with great flow.
Typo here, Hmm your desperate aren't you Jack FIresteel...?
your is changed to you're.
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