Thread: The Dark Age
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Old 09-08-2011, 01:18 AM
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Ooh, looks like you've got a good story set up, Johnny! The only thing I want to suggest is that you work on the grammar and punctuation mistakes that you made - working on quotation marks, capitalization, etc. Other than that, keep it up!