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The Tale Of Tobias (tell me what you think pls:)
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07-25-2010, 11:26 PM
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In the words of me editor, "You don't explain, You show". If you do explain it would be a first-class story. (Sorry for the harsh review)
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07-25-2010, 11:30 PM
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....and then he met Potions Pirate. (And who knows what she did to him... muahaha..)
Pretty good, but I kinda have to agree with muffin. Keep working, and you'll be a great author some day!
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