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The Mysteries of Devil's Anvil
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07-28-2010, 05:53 PM
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Very nice, Rose! I liked how you left the readers hanging at the end there.
Just one word for ya: paragraphs. You might wanna break up those big blocks of text in to smaller, more managable paragraphs, so it doesn't look like the story is constantly jumbling around. |
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07-28-2010, 05:55 PM
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Wrong story. Wrong person.
I fixed it, look at it now @_@
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