The firow stories

[finn]

When it All Changed

That one day happened ONLY A MONTH after Finn turned 5.

On 1 stormy night Finn was inside the house playing chess with his brother when it happened A PIRATE ATTACK it was the pirate attack of captain barabossa on port royal. THEIR FATHER WAS STILL OUT ON GUARD DUTY! THEIR MOTHER WAS NO WHERE TO BE FOUND!

They sprinted out running towards the castle and there, right before their eyes was a green glowing skeletal figure dressed in purple, it was jolly roger and by his sides were their mother and father dead surrounded in flame, flame that emited cold air instead of heat and the fact that his parents is what, more than anything is what made Finn writhe on the floor in pain pain to such a degree that there was no way it could be physical it was a wound an ecoh that could be felt by voodoo users and pirates ALL over the world it was pain that grew a bond between Rowan and finn as they shared this pain they would share a need for eachother a need for friends and allies and a need for revenge. As jolly disapeared.



NOTE:
I'm sure u have all noticed how my story has no dialog well dialog doesnt make a good story dialog is a great add on and i am going to have dialog to make this better but there has been barely 2 chances for that

[Mr. Skiperdoo]

Originally Posted by finn

I'm sure u have all noticed how my story has no dialog well dialog doesnt make a good story dialog is a great add on and i am going to have dialog to make this better but there has been barly 2 chances for that

Grammar mistakes aside, my best advice for you would be to write the story in your own style. Creating new and innovative ideas can be a great way to make a story that's different.

Just remember to make them a little longer.

[finn]

Originally Posted by Mr. Skiperdoo

Grammar mistakes aside, my best advice for you would be to write the story in your own style. Creating new and innovative ideas can be a great way to make a story that's different.

Just remember to make them a little longer.

thank you i will be updating every day and if i miss a day i will make a longer part the next time

but again thank u for your advice