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07-09-2011, 08:41 PM
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It's definitely a wonderful start. I can see you possibly stretching out this intro even more, perhaps by giving more feeling and description to the swamp or the old man (Unless he's supposed to stay pretty nondescript, that is) and pulling me in even more. I can definitely tell you that I was interested though.
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