Journey of the Last of the Bladebearers Chapter 5

[Captain Del]

Very good, Gastro! I especially like the part where I am in it

Just two suggestions:

1. Add more detail to it. Don't let your story lay solely in dialogue.

2. I would suggest making a single thread to post all of your chapters, so you can keep track of them, and you don't end up spamming the story forum.